Thank you, I apologize for all the grammar mistakes. Today I uploaded an update with plenty of corrections (I know it's late, but I didn't want to leave it like that). The biggest problem I had was using past vs present tense when describing actions. At the beginning he's clearly talking about the past but when he gets to the end I was never sure how to describe things as they happened. I know it's kind of awkward in some spots because of that. If you have any resourses on writting/story-telling techniques to recommend, I'd be glad to check them out.
Really? T.T Gee, I pent like 2 hours copy everything to an online spell checker to make sure. Then again, I had spent all of yesterday working on it. I was pretty burned out. I'll proof read it again and upload an update when I can.
Yeah, that's true. I got so overzealous I ran out of time to properly proof read the whole thing. I probably should just have given up on the Jam due date and uploaded it when I was sure it was ready. Still, thank you for your feedback.
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I liked this! You have a really neat setup with very interesting outcomes.
Thank you, I apologize for all the grammar mistakes. Today I uploaded an update with plenty of corrections (I know it's late, but I didn't want to leave it like that). The biggest problem I had was using past vs present tense when describing actions. At the beginning he's clearly talking about the past but when he gets to the end I was never sure how to describe things as they happened. I know it's kind of awkward in some spots because of that. If you have any resourses on writting/story-telling techniques to recommend, I'd be glad to check them out.
There are some typos everywhere, but it's a really interesting game!
Really? T.T Gee, I pent like 2 hours copy everything to an online spell checker to make sure. Then again, I had spent all of yesterday working on it. I was pretty burned out. I'll proof read it again and upload an update when I can.
More like grammar problems, so a spellchecker wont find them :p
Yeah, that's true. I got so overzealous I ran out of time to properly proof read the whole thing. I probably should just have given up on the Jam due date and uploaded it when I was sure it was ready. Still, thank you for your feedback.